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Wow. So, for all you people who actually have time to read this all at once, here you go. I added a few extras and made a few edits so this is the final version on Warriors: Dusk, the first book in my 6 book series.
This took me sooooo long to do. I started this book in October. Ended it in February, I think. Edited and re-did it in the past two months. Now you know what I've been working on other that Light and Dark.
But I did it! Hooray!
EDIT: I'll be making edits like these when I find mistakes. Help me find them too if you readers can point them out.
1. Accidentally named Scourge "Bane" in the last paragraph of Chapter 1 (FIXED)
2. Claude had a mark on his chest from the Twins. I forgot about him... He's not a commander, so I removed the mark.
3. Cinsen spoke weirdly to Silas... I made him sound better.
This took me sooooo long to do. I started this book in October. Ended it in February, I think. Edited and re-did it in the past two months. Now you know what I've been working on other that Light and Dark.But I did it! Hooray!
EDIT: I'll be making edits like these when I find mistakes. Help me find them too if you readers can point them out.
1. Accidentally named Scourge "Bane" in the last paragraph of Chapter 1 (FIXED)
2. Claude had a mark on his chest from the Twins. I forgot about him... He's not a commander, so I removed the mark.
3. Cinsen spoke weirdly to Silas... I made him sound better.
4. Echopaw is only about 8 moons old. Ignore what it says in the prologue for now.
5. Fixed the edit above. Also made a lot more changes to make it sound better.
6. I put Lionheart instead of Lionblaze in a few places... and I edited a few more mistakes... Gonna redo the entire collection of chapters soon!
PLEASE CRITIQUE!!! I WANT TO KNOW WHAT YOU THINK OF THE STORY. TOO CONFUSING MAYBE? TOO SAD? MORE DETAIL? I NEED TO KNOW WHAT I CAN IMPROVE ON, SO PLEASE CRITIQUE IT IN THE COMMENTS.
This work is inspired and derived off of Erin Hunter's "Warriors" series. Any and all characters or names related to the original books belong to them.
PLEASE CRITIQUE!!! I WANT TO KNOW WHAT YOU THINK OF THE STORY. TOO CONFUSING MAYBE? TOO SAD? MORE DETAIL? I NEED TO KNOW WHAT I CAN IMPROVE ON, SO PLEASE CRITIQUE IT IN THE COMMENTS.
This work is inspired and derived off of Erin Hunter's "Warriors" series. Any and all characters or names related to the original books belong to them.
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